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Stem Sunders

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The Trials Of CritterBait!
« on: November 23, 2014, 06:09:12 PM »

Enjoy.

You can download the image and zoom to your prefered magnification, Or use the arrow keys to scroll. As a portion is constantly off screen. :)
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Entry 1, Finding Phoenix (Its rough out there)

Follow CritterBait as he tries to find a place in the unforgiving world of Phoenix...If he ever finds Phoenix that is...

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Entry 2, Finding Phoenix pt 2 (Watch your step) (IN COLOR!!!)

Follow CritterBait in his continuing search for Phoenix proper.
Watch your step CritterBait!
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Entry 3, Debts paid (A life for a life)

Follow CritterBait as he is tasked with paying back a debt he never really signed up for...
Well, they did save your life CritterBait!

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Entry 4, Spies and secrets.

Who exactly was that mysterious robed prisoner of the law? And just exactly who is CritterBait searching for?

Find out now through Spies, secrets and...circuits...
« Last Edit: November 25, 2014, 04:25:22 PM by Stem Sunders »
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Re: The Trials Of CritterBait!
« Reply #1 on: November 23, 2014, 06:11:55 PM »

hehe nice collage
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Re: The Trials Of CritterBait!
« Reply #2 on: November 23, 2014, 09:22:41 PM »

Gj, seems decent and worthwhile ;)
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« Reply #3 on: November 23, 2014, 10:09:50 PM »

Gj, seems decent and worthwhile ;)

Yeah, It killed some time. Getting the shots was fun.
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Re: The Trials Of CritterBait!
« Reply #4 on: November 24, 2014, 10:56:49 AM »

Pt 2 is up :D I'm having fun.

In color this time!

I dont understand why things blur a little on exporting though...Enjoy.
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Re: The Trials Of CritterBait!
« Reply #5 on: November 24, 2014, 11:08:07 AM »

I've got confused with the fridge->getting blown up (by a mine?) part, seems that some pages are not in place, eh?
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Re: The Trials Of CritterBait!
« Reply #6 on: November 24, 2014, 11:10:58 AM »

I've got confused with the fridge->getting blown up (by a mine?) part, seems that some pages are not in place, eh?

The fridge never got blown up...:s

You mean when he say "Damn no water?" he searched the body I guess I thought that was implied but maybe not :D

His leg was hurt before he got to the fridge, he collapsed on teh way out.
It all made sense to me but then again it would haha, I'll try harder for them to make more sense next time.

Maybe I should number the panels?
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« Reply #7 on: November 24, 2014, 11:24:59 AM »

I thought that he ate something bad and dropped because of intoxication.
Same as guy who was there before.
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Re: The Trials Of CritterBait!
« Reply #8 on: November 24, 2014, 11:28:32 AM »

То ли лыжи не едут, то ли я ебанутый...

"Damn no water..." is his response to getting blown by a mine, and when he gets up he yells "WTF?!" ? :)

Then sometimes it's manhwa\manga style (right to left), most of the times left>right.

And I'm sorry, but I'm pretty sure a pool of blood from your torso is not a "black-out" condition ;D.
Either way, it's still good to see this, would want to hear the rest of the story.
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« Reply #9 on: November 24, 2014, 11:35:48 AM »

То ли лыжи не едут, то ли я ебанутый...

"Damn no water..." is his response to getting blown by a mine, and when he gets up he yells "WTF?!" ? :)

Then sometimes it's manhwa\manga style (right to left), most of the times left>right.

And I'm sorry, but I'm pretty sure a pool of blood from your torso is not a "black-out" condition ;D.
Either way, it's still good to see this, would want to hear the rest of the story.

It should all be read from left to right.

I'm working with limitations here XD any time you see blood like that just go with it, since its not my fault :p its teh game. (Spose I could paint the blood in)

"WHAT THE FUCK" is in response to getting blown up
the "Damn no water" was in response to the body :D it just stayed above his head when he was blown up

FUN FACT!!!
I didnt stage the mines, it was total accident I just didnt see them until I stood on one. I was actually trying to walk around them but I decided to use it.
I didnt stage the dead bodies in part one either. that is how it played out. it can be hard to get timing right for the shots.

More soon.
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« Reply #10 on: November 24, 2014, 11:44:31 AM »

I thought that he ate something bad and dropped because of intoxication.
Same as guy who was there before.

Can't see what gave you that indication but ill try to make sense next time.:)
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« Reply #11 on: November 24, 2014, 11:47:32 AM »

Then everything is a'right! Actually "improvised" events are even better, imagine how immersive this story would be, if the large playerbase was still around. Let's just wait for our grand mage to conjure a spell powerfull enough to crush the minds of infidels and convert them back to the fun side.
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« Reply #12 on: November 24, 2014, 11:52:10 AM »

Then everything is a'right! Actually "improvised" events are even better, imagine how immersive this story would be, if the large playerbase was still around. Let's just wait for our grand mage to conjure a spell powerfull enough to crush the minds of infidels and convert them back to the fun side.

I for one cant wait, it will happen! The power or our grand mage and retinue are unmatched!

I don't know how I'm going to incorporate other players into this story. Still something I'm gonna have to figure out in a practical way.

I can turn off names,HUD's and such but cant control the movements or words of others. So I'll have to walk around spamming F3 in certain situations and hope I get some good shots :D
So far I havent had to worry about being blasted in the middle of capping screens  :D
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« Reply #13 on: November 24, 2014, 12:03:09 PM »

Very nicely done, story and work !

About the mine part, yeah maybe you could have changed the order of the pics so he steps on the mine on his way back, could be more understandable :D

Please make more :D
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« Reply #14 on: November 24, 2014, 12:39:10 PM »

I had no problems with order at all.

It just a little bit unclear that he stepped at the mine (if you're not experienced player), and how strong is the damage.

But after he ate some strange meat, I just imagined that he wasn't the only one who did the same and died because of that.
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« Reply #15 on: November 24, 2014, 05:10:45 PM »

Pt 3 is up!  :)

Set a short period after pt 2 ends.

Hopefully it flows better this time.

Enjoy.
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« Reply #16 on: November 24, 2014, 09:48:49 PM »

Are those going to be 4 on-going stories about 4 people struggling in their factions?
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« Reply #17 on: November 24, 2014, 10:00:26 PM »

Are those going to be 4 on-going stories about 4 people struggling in their factions?

Not exactly, factions will be more like set pieces for the characters rather than the main focus of this story. I do have a direction and definite end in mind. Its very much about CritterBait and the "trials" he must go through
Did you notice CB gave the reason he's in Phoenix in his last panel?
There are now two characters we know about.

I dont wanna say anymore.
Your speculation is nice though, some of it has to be left up to interpretation.  :D
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« Reply #18 on: November 24, 2014, 10:31:43 PM »

Idk, your story could magically turn into 'factionless' faction request ^^.
A story about 4 survivors hating each other in the beginning, but comrades in the end (you can put none, or unlimited content in between)
With the last panel being 'volvo fixpls cirn0 pls add'.

Take your time with it, you've managed to hook me on that so far ^^
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« Reply #19 on: November 25, 2014, 04:48:16 AM »

Stem tell me if you need anything on Lawyer side for your story :)

EDIT : I showed it to a friend who doesnt know AoP, it is quite hard to understand the link between pages 2 and 3. Maybe add a little page between them showing CritterBait in Family HQ, talking to the Don and maybe buying or trading the jacket ?
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